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Title: Henriette Reviewer: Zam Signed

I hope you give us a little more of this story.  Henriette remains a bit begrudging at the end.  There are more opportunities here for you and for Henriette.

Overall, it's a nice reflection by both Sabels.

Date: 10/04/2010 00:16 [Report This]
Title: Christian and Olli Reviewer: CraveChrolli Signed

Liz,

Thank you so much for this story! I really wanted (and expected) to see this scene on VL after Olli's mother left him at No Limits. I was pretty disappointed that we didn't get to see Christian be there for Olli in those moments, and make him see how special and wonderful he is. Thanks for giving this to us!! It's exactly how I imagined it should be.

Cravechrolli

Date: 09/10/2010 17:29 [Report This]
Title: Christian and Olli Reviewer: Silverkit Signed

I really like how you wrote Olli here. To have his mother reject him all over again must have crushed him. I also liked the quick throw to what Axel did to Olli because I imagine that will be something that always haunts Christian.

 

Lovely work!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Date: 09/09/2010 06:41 [Report This]
Title: Henriette Reviewer: Avidbel Signed

Do like the machinations of Henni's mind.. So maternal yet still cannot come to terms and say that her son in 'gay', every thing but.   She realises that he loves Christian and that it is totaly mutual.  Even the last line /..."The helpul store clerk doesn't need to know the unpleasant details"../  Why unpleasant?  Oh Henni you still have a journey to take, hope you reach your destination in time and in good heart...

Well done, LizG12. Love it.

Regards, Avidbel.

Date: 09/08/2010 09:58 [Report This]
Title: Henriette Reviewer: thunderkat Signed

Wonderful insight,and you really do credit to the actress here by letting us in on her inner monologue, which isn't hateful, just confused and frightened really. And that's what most ignorance comes from, just fear of the unknown.  But it's great how you have her new knowledge, i.e. chris and olli's relationship, as well as the success of her son subtly working to change her mind.  and then the 180 at the end, though i found it a little abrupt was still great, setting up her dramatic entrance on the day of the wedding. 

Date: 09/08/2010 05:48 [Report This]
Title: Christian and Olli Reviewer: thunderkat Signed

Liz!

So so thrilled to see something from you, and as usual it holds to your excellent standards.  You really know the emotional life of these boys so so well!

This was an EXCELLENT parallel to draw between Henriette and Axel, and of course Christian does the Mann-ly thing and draws the blame on to himself.  Amazing how you described Olli's utter devastation, he has completely had the heart ripped out of him and it's bitter sweet because on one hand, it's the destruction of any chance of a relationship with his mother, on the other hand it reaffirms the strength of his relationship with Christian.  

Really great Liz. 



Author's Response:

Thanks, the look on Olli's face just reminded me so much of Olli walking out of the hospital ...

Date: 09/08/2010 05:43 [Report This]
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