Totally read the whole story and it was wonderful. Loved how you jumped so far ahead into the future and they were still together. Walking, holding hands. Wonderful story
I would like to read more of this story Good job!
I know that imitation is the sincerest form of flattery and all....but, it would be nice if it was explicitly mentioned that you took bel7003's alternative-universe plot line, and are retelling it (or even asked bel7003's permission to do so).
It really jarred me when I read about Christian taking over for NL while Olli goes to Mallorca, and then, rather than calling to tell Olli, he texts him. That is ALL bel7003's story. Why are you copying it, action for action?
I am sure you can tell a story of your own. Get creative, have fun, play with your OWN vision.
Waiting to see and hear your own voice, in this story.
Thanks for your critizism but I do believe it is a logical setting to start with my story......... I undstand my setting is very similar with the other writer on the line. However, when I start this story, I think I should gave the logical setting to let the story unfolds. That is why you find they are quite different. The reason for me to create this story is not to create the alternae vision of the other's work but try to see whether I can really recreate the buring sensation between those two characters. I am sorry that my work may offend you.
Wow a really powerful, powerful chapter. I like that you go into what Ollie is thinking about the whole situation between him and Christian. Now I really hope Ollie makes it to Christian in time. Maybe that is just what he needs-hope
I am really liking your story. I like the different takes on how this story will end. All of them SEEM to be heading towards a happy ending. Lets see where yours goes.
Thanks for your support. Personally I really like to have a happy ending if possible but at this point I am not sure. so I guess I have to wait and see myself as well.